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Monday, May 23, 2016

The Worst Day Of My Life

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.


Success Criteria
I know I will be successful when my recount has a
  • Title
  • Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
  • Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
  • Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?
First Draft


The Worst Day Of My Life


The 19th August 1997. It was 26 degrees.  Me and my family were walking along the river bank in African Savanna because our migration had started. I was so proud because my dad was a Bull.
I was playing with my friend and my dad came and said to come with him. I followed my dad if I stayed there like 5 more minutes I might meet my 2 dangerous enemies.


I knew we are in trouble when my dad stopped in his track. I smelled fear in the air.  My dad saw the pride of lions and they also saw us. My dad gave a signal to run it was loud as a fire alarm and we started running. The lions ran up to 50km/h. We were just in 40 km/h and they caught me! When they caught me we fall of near the river, when I fall off near the river I felt wet and cold .  I smelled because It was someone who had really stinky teeth. I turned around and looked. “It was a deadly crocodile”!. The deadly crocodile also try to take me for his dinner.  I tried to tickle the lion when I took my tongue to one lion’s stomach it was “Yuck”!  The lions got me out of the river. Just when the lions took me out my dad and his friends came to rescue me. I yelled MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!Then I got rescued my dad and his friends went in front of lions and tried to kick them then they got scared and they ran away. Then I went back to our home together with my dad happily.


Now I am safe Thanks to my family now we went home and had some fish, chips and all my crying has paid off hopefully I don't have to face them again in my life or it happens to me  in a few years time and we lived happily ever after.


4 comments:

  1. Good job Samyog.

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  2. Well Done Samyog I like the part when it says Mooooooooooooooooooooooooo! Went the buffalo's,and when you did your work you put a picture in my head, like I thought you were in the seen getting hurt and getting played with.great job anyway.

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    1. HI Abbagale, Thanks for commenting on my blog :D.

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    2. HI Abbagale, Thanks for commenting on my blog :D.

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